Wednesday, February 17, 2010

This is a Public School?, 2/16/10

15 minutes of writing

I again looked at the microcommunities manuscript, and, again, was concerned about the personal perspective. So, I sent it off to Vicki and Joel for their feedback. Both concurred; it's too much of the first-person perspective. They provided excellent feedback and suggestions for new directions.

I don't think de-personalizing the manuscript will be terribly difficult, but I'd prefer to finish with the assessment paper before continuing on this one.

This is a Public School?, 2/14/10

20 minutes of writing

I revisited the "This is a Public School?" paper and really like it a lot... But, it's so personal/first person perspective that I worry it might not appeal to a Kappan audience. I sent it to Char with a request for edits and she provided some great feedback (which I have yet to integrate into the paper).

Assessment Paper, 2/12/10

22 minutes of writing

I worked on editing the rest of the assessment paper and there were only small changes to make. Char provided me with editorial suggestions and I hope to hear Steve's recommended editorial remarks within the next few days.

Sunday, February 7, 2010

Assessment Paper, 2/7/10

30 minutes of writing

I edited the beginning through the literature review of the assessment paper. The section needs greater cohesion, but I'm not sure how to do that. I'm getting happier with the dates of the citations, but this is also a concern (particularly given that the first citation in the introduction is from 1996.

Being accountable to my writing with Char has been very beneficial. I've written more this week than I have in a long time. I hope to keep up even this minor improvement.

Tuesday, February 2, 2010

Assessment Paper, 2/3/10

110 minutes of writing

Thanks to Char, I'm trying to get back on the "writing horse." Steve has also worked hard to motivate me to finish the literature review for the assessment paper so we can get it back under review.

In reviewing the literature review, I saw that there was no discussion of the exciting work being done at Harvard with emerging technologies. I also couldn't avoid adding in some mention of the Gee and Squires work on digital gaming in educational environments.

I have not re-worked the entire section, but did add a significant portion to the end of the literature review. I think this makes the paper much stronger.

Next, I need to review the entire paper (it might need some updating in regard to citations), and, again, get it ready and send it out for review.